Cancelling a Part-Time College Course Booking

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter • say which part-time course you booked • explain why you need to cancel your booking • ask about booking a different course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Annotated response

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I am writing to my enrollment in the part-time course “Advanced Data Analytics,” initially scheduled to commence on the 15th of May, 2024. An unanticipated professional , requiring me to temporarily relocate to another country for a short-term project. As a result, to attend the course as initially planned due to the logistical challenges this temporary relocation will entail.

While this decision was not made lightly, as I had been eagerly anticipating the opportunity to enhance my skills in data analytics, the circumstances have rendered it unavoidable. However, I remain deeply committed to furthering my education and would be grateful if you could advise me on any similar that might better accommodate my changing circumstances. The knowledge and expertise gained from such a course would be invaluable in advancing my career prospects and staying competitive in the rapidly evolving field of data analytics.

I appreciate your understanding and assistance in this matter and look forward to exploring alternative educational opportunities with your . Your commitment to providing high-quality, relevant programs is commendable, and I am confident that we can find a suitable solution that aligns with my goals while respecting the demands of my current professional endeavor.

Sincerely,

Rohit Sinha

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The strongest aspect is the fluent, controlled language, which conveys the cancellation clearly and professionally with precise vocabulary and varied structures. The main limitation is the somewhat padded and overly formal elaboration, along with a non-standard salutation and a vague request about alternative courses that leaves the enquiry underdeveloped.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

7.0

All three bullet points are addressed with relevant detail, but the opening salutation deviates from the prescribed format and the request about a different course remains somewhat vague rather than concrete, and the elaboration is padded.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

The letter is coherently organised with clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices used naturally, though some sentences are unnecessarily extended.

Lexical Resource

8.0

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with sophisticated phrasing such as 'unanticipated professional opportunity' and 'rendered it unavoidable', though occasional inflation borders on unnatural formality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5

A wide range of complex structures is used with generally strong control and accuracy, with only rare lapses in naturalness such as 'regretfully inform you of my need to cancel'.

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