Spending More Time Away from Families

The response addresses both questions directly with a clear position, relevant causes and effects, and a concrete supporting example, though some ideas remain under-elaborated rather than fully extended.

Ideas are organised in clear paragraphs with logical progression and effective cohesive devices, with only occasional mechanical linking and slightly abrupt transitions within paragraphs.

There is a good range of topic-appropriate vocabulary used with some flexibility, though occasional imprecise or awkward collocations such as being open to life-changing doors slightly reduce precision.

Complex structures are generally controlled, including relative clauses and a semicolon joining related ideas. The “made it easier” sentence leaves the action unstated, and several punctuation marks have stray preceding spaces.

The response addresses both questions with financial and employment-related causes and effects on stress and family bonds. The connection between new occupations and multinational employers needs clarification, and the conclusion could synthesize these causes and effects more specifically.

Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with effective cohesive devices, though phrases like 'aforementioned' and 'Initially' occasionally feel mechanical.

Vocabulary is flexible and generally precise with good topic-related range, but some collocations and phrases such as 'other imaginable forms of support' are unnatural.

Sentence structures are varied and mostly accurate, with effective complex forms. Article use and quantity expressions need attention, as in “The society”, “a decreased time” and the missing determiner before “parent-child relationship”.

The essay addresses causes and both positive and negative effects, using relocation, entertainment and business examples. However, solitary entertainment is not clearly linked to having to be away from family, and the claims about entrepreneurs and an intergenerational vicious circle need fuller causal explanation.

Ideas progress logically within and across paragraphs with cohesive devices like 'as a result' and 'on the other hand', though some linkages, such as the 'vicious circle' chain, are slightly loosely managed.

Vocabulary is varied and often precise, including “lucrative offers” and “dysfunctional family”. Less natural combinations such as “consequences on”, “working performance” and “accompany their families” sometimes reduce precision.

Complex sentences and relative clauses are generally controlled well. The opening construction with “where” is awkward, and “A vicious circle is therefore created that” needs a clearer grammatical link to the clause describing the cycle.

Both questions are fully addressed with a clear explanation of globalisation-driven workload and developed effects on individuals and families, supported by relevant examples.

Ideas progress logically from causes to effects with appropriate cohesive devices and a clear concluding position, though some long sentences blur internal boundaries.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'support system', 'chronic tension' and 'gravely affect', despite occasional loose phrasing.

A variety of complex structures are used with generally good control. Missing commas between list items, such as “work overtime travel overseas”, and before a supplementary which clause are noticeable errors, although the intended meaning remains clear.

Both questions are fully addressed with a clear position, logically developed causes and effects, and a relevant concluding recommendation, though supporting examples remain general rather than specific.

The essay progresses coherently through clear paragraphs with effective linking of ideas and referencing, with only occasional slightly mechanical transitions.

Vocabulary is varied and generally effective, including “takes its toll” and “a vicious cycle.” Precision occasionally slips: “marital affairs” should be “extramarital affairs” when referring to infidelity.

Complex conditionals, relative clauses and subordinate clauses are generally controlled accurately. The sentence patterns vary effectively, with no clear need to add simpler constructions merely for variety.

The response addresses both questions with relevant causes and effects, but the 56-word shortfall and general treatment leave ideas insufficiently developed for a higher band.

Ideas are logically sequenced across clear paragraphs with effective use of cohesive devices and a strong concluding summary.

Topic-related vocabulary is varied and generally well controlled. “Under the illusion” is idiomatic; its strong implication that virtual contact cannot replace physical presence needs argumentative support rather than a lexical correction.

Complex structures, including concessive clauses, a relative clause and participial clauses, are used accurately. The response shows good sentence control, with no clear grammatical error requiring correction.