The response addresses the two questions in form only, but the causes offered (government responsibility, tuition fees abroad) do not explain why places look similar, and arguments such as the Rajasthan example are unclear or irrelevant, leaving the position barely supported.
4.0Paragraph organisation exists, but progression within paragraphs is frequently confusing, with faulty logic chains, abrupt example links, and referencing that does not clearly connect ideas.
4.0There is some formulaic vocabulary such as 'first and foremost' and 'burning question of the day', but word choice is often inaccurate or unnatural, including 'opine', 'deep pockets is transferring', and the repeated use of 'scenario' where the intended meaning is unclear.
5.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are limited and error-prone, with frequent problems in articles, agreement, tense, and fragments such as 'Because the scenario of the Rajasthan is the same from decades ago', which regularly impede understanding.
4.0What to work on next
Before writing, plan two or three causes directly related to the question, such as globalisation, chain brands, and international architecture, and support each with a clear, relevant example in accurate sentences.