父母与学校:谁来教孩子做社会的好成员

Teaching Children to Be Good Members of Society

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

有些人认为,父母应该教孩子如何成为社会的好成员。然而,另一些人认为学校才是学习这一点的地方。

请讨论这两种观点,并给出你自己的看法。

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写作思路:父母与学校:谁来教孩子做社会的好成员

为什么这是讨论类 ,要求你讨论两种对立的观点,并给出自己的看法。

所以我们把思路分为第一种观点(支持第一种观点)和第二种观点(支持第二种观点)。

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第二种观点

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总体评价

The response addresses both views and states an opinion, with ideas generally connected through a range of linking devices. The main limitation is uneven development, as the discussion of each view is brief and the opinion is introduced awkwardly within a paragraph about the opposing view. Language is generally adequate, though recurring errors in phrasing and word choice persist throughout.

TR

任务回应

Both views are addressed and a position is expressed, but the opinion is embedded confusingly and the arguments are only partly developed with limited support.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression is broadly clear and cohesive devices are used, though some connections are mechanical and paragraph logic is occasionally muddled, especially in the opening and second paragraph.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some appropriate collocations, but there are noticeable word-choice errors such as 'should be thought', 'charged of', and 'set parents free from this duty'.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with some flexibility, while frequent errors in agreement, article use, and phrasing slightly reduce overall accuracy.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Develop each view more fully with clearer supporting explanations and present your opinion in a distinct, well-signposted position.

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