强制儿童接种疫苗与家长选择权

Mandatory Childhood Vaccination vs Parental Choice

Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

现在许多儿童疾病可以通过接种疫苗来预防。是否应该通过法律要求家长让孩子接种常见疾病的疫苗,还是应该让个人有权选择不给孩子接种?

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总体评价

The response states a clear position favouring legal enforcement of vaccination and ends with a concrete policy proposal, which is its strongest feature. Its main limitation is that much of the essay discusses parental care in general rather than the vaccination question itself, and frequent inaccurate word choices and grammatical errors repeatedly obscure the message.

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The position in favour of legally requiring immunisation is eventually stated and a supporting measure is proposed, but most of the response addresses general parental care rather than the question, leaving ideas only partially developed and relevantly supported.

5.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are arranged into paragraphs but progression is often unclear because general remarks about parenting and health are not linked to the vaccination issue, and cohesive devices such as 'That's why' and 'because of that' connect ideas imprecisely.

5.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary shows some attempt at less common items but includes frequent inappropriate choices, such as 'threatening creatures', 'it must be a scandal', 'another variant could not be perceptible' and 'immunity system', which limit precision of meaning.

5.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A limited range of sentence structures is attempted, but frequent errors, including 'an aid of protection', 'their immunity system is just started', 'the body will destroy' and 'pay attentions', regularly obscure meaning in places.

5.0

下一步改进重点

Focus every paragraph directly on the immunisation question and revise wording and sentence structure so each argument is expressed accurately and clearly.

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