Both questions are addressed with relevant reasons and discussion of benefits and costs. However, the link from admission competition to innovation is underdeveloped, and the final positive judgment for society is not clearly reconciled with the earlier emphasis on mixed effects.
6.0Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with effective linking devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'However', with only minor mechanical use and a slightly compressed conclusion.
7.0Vocabulary is flexibly used with some precision, including items like 'tertiary education', 'prestigious', 'influx', and 'take a toll', though occasional phrasing such as 'ultimate burnout' is imprecise.
7.0A good range of complex structures is used with generally strong control, including subordinate clauses, relative clauses and passives. Some constructions could be more direct, but meaning remains clear throughout.
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