电脑让生活更轻松还是更有压力

Do Computers Make Life Easier or More Stressful

While some people opine that computers have made our life more convenient and easier, others, however, oppose it and say that computers have actually made our life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion on this?

一些人认为,电脑让我们的生活更加便利、更加轻松,而另一些人则反对这种看法,认为电脑实际上让我们的生活更加复杂、更有压力。你对此有什么看法?

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总体评价

The strongest aspect is a clearly stated opinion that computers are essential despite health and social risks, supported by some relevant examples. The main limitation is persistent imprecise wording and grammatical error, alongside ideas that remain thinly developed and loosely organised.

TR

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A clear position is presented and both benefits and harms are touched on, but ideas are only partially developed, examples are thin, and points such as the history of the computer do not advance the argument.

5.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The response has an overall shape with linking devices, but progression is mechanical and sometimes illogical, with misused sequencing like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly' and abrupt shifts between ideas.

5.0
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词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic but limited and often imprecise, with noticeable awkward or incorrect phrasing such as 'makes easy many kinds of jobs', 'do people slothful', and 'do lightly videos'.

5.0
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语法多样性与准确性

A mix of simple and some complex structures appears, but frequent errors in article use, verb forms, and sentence construction, such as 'can be damage human's eyesight', regularly reduce accuracy and clarity.

5.0

下一步改进重点

Develop each main point into a full explanation with a clear example, and revise the response to remove recurring grammar and word-choice errors.

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