写给朋友的搬家来信

Letter to a Friend About Moving House

You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter • explain why you have moved • describe the new house • invite your friend to come and visit Dear.............,

你最近搬到了另一所房子。给一位说英语的朋友写一封信。在信中 • 解释你为什么搬家 • 描述新房子 • 邀请你的朋友来拜访 Dear.............,

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书信要点:写给朋友的搬家来信

为什么这是非正式书信 ,要求你用友好的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Explain why you have moved

9个要点

Describe the new house

12个要点

Invite your friend to come and visit

7个要点

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估算分数6.5/ 9

总体评价

The letter addresses all three required points with relevant detail and a friendly tone. However, it is presented as one continuous block, including the greeting and closing, which weakens organisation. Some awkward wording and punctuation also reduce precision, particularly the explanation beginning "And the reason, for which".

TA

任务完成情况

The letter fully covers all three bullets—reason for moving, description of the new house, and a warm invitation—with an appropriately friendly tone and relevant detail.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The reasons, house description and invitation follow an understandable sequence, but the entire letter, including greeting and closing, is presented as one continuous paragraph. Separating these stages would make the message easier to follow.

5.5
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly natural for an informal letter, with effective phrases like 'feeling suffocated' and 'public transportation facilities', despite a few imprecise wordings.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Complex and relative clauses generally communicate the message clearly. However, the commas around "for which" interrupt the restrictive explanation of the reason. The phrase "as long as they are available" is grammatically possible, although its meaning in this description is unclear.

6.5

下一步改进重点

Separate the greeting, reasons for moving, house description, invitation and closing into readable sections. Then simplify the explanation of the reason and remove the commas that interrupt "the reason for which".

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