就学习新运动给朋友提建议

Advice to a Friend on Learning a New Sport

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport.

Write an email to your friend. In your email • recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn • explain how your friend could learn this sport • suggest that you both learn this sport together.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows: Dear ……………,

你住在同一城镇、说英语的朋友向你征求关于学习一项新运动的建议。

给你的朋友写一封电子邮件。在邮件中

• 推荐一项适合你的朋友学习的新运动

• 解释你的朋友可以如何学习这项运动

• 建议你们俩一起学习这项运动。

不需要写任何地址。

信的开头写:

Dear ……………,

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书信要点:就学习新运动给朋友提建议

为什么这是非正式书信 ,要求你用友好的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn

8个要点

Explain how your friend could learn this sport

6个要点

Suggest that you both learn this sport together

2个要点

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The letter's strongest aspect is its warm, natural informal register and complete coverage of all three bullet points in the prompt. The main limitation is that the explanation of how to learn the sport is developed only briefly, and a few phrasing choices are slightly awkward without obscuring meaning.

TA

任务完成情况

The email clearly addresses all three bullet points with a suitable friendly tone, recommending table tennis, outlining a basic learning approach, and proposing learning together, though the learning detail is somewhat thin.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas progress logically from greeting to recommendation to learning method to invitation, with cohesive devices used naturally, though some transitions such as repeated 'But' feel slightly mechanical.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is natural and appropriately informal for a friend, with idiomatic expressions like 'at will' and 'guess what', alongside occasional awkward phrasing such as 'advice in learning'.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A good range of sentence structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with generally accurate control and only minor, non-impeding errors.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Expand the practical learning steps, such as naming a club, coach, or practice schedule, to give the advice more concrete detail.

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