给国际学生俱乐部组织者写信谈美食活动

Letter to International Students Club Organiser About Food Event

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising

an event to celebrate popular food from around the world.

Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter

• offer to make a popular dish from your country

• describe what this dish is

• explain why it should be included in the event

Dear Luis,

你是国际学生俱乐部的成员。该俱乐部正在组织

一场活动,庆祝世界各地的受欢迎美食。

给活动组织者 Luis 写一封信。在信中

• 表示愿意制作一道你们国家的受欢迎菜肴

• 描述这道菜是什么

• 解释为什么它应该被纳入这次活动

Dear Luis,

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书信要点:给国际学生俱乐部组织者写信谈美食活动

为什么这是半正式书信 ,要求你用礼貌、半正式的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Offer to make a popular dish from your country

3个要点

Describe what this dish is

10个要点

Explain why it should be included in the event

8个要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The letter covers all three bullet points with a clear purpose and relevant detail about Poutine, and the tone is suitably friendly and semi-formal. Its main limitation is recurring grammatical and lexical inaccuracy, including 'take participate', 'the informations', and misused linkers, which makes several sentences awkward and sometimes requires the reader to infer the intended meaning.

TA

任务完成情况

The letter addresses all three bullets—offering to make Poutine, describing its ingredients and origin, and explaining its appeal to guests—with an appropriate semi-formal tone, though some ideas are briefly or awkwardly developed.

6.5
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression through the bullet points is clear and paragraphing is logical, but cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, as in 'While, I was going through' and 'Apart from it'.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is adequate for the purpose, with topic-appropriate words such as 'gravy' and 'aroma', but errors such as 'take participate', 'the informations book', and 'taste is speechless' reduce precision.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, yet frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and verb forms ('most of people bringing', 'its not too complicated and involve') are noticeable while meaning remains mostly clear.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Revise common grammar and word-choice errors, particularly verb patterns, pluralisation, and linking devices, while keeping the clear structure already present.

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