The response covers the main changes, including the removed garden and footpath, the enlarged car park and the new shop, with a clear overview. The classroom totals are correct, although fixed directions would clarify their positions. The car park claims overstate the evidence: the present plan shows four cars without a stated maximum, and the proposed plan shows six, not seven.
7.0Ideas progress logically from overview to present layout to future changes, and cohesive devices such as meanwhile, furthermore and finally are used naturally without mechanical repetition.
7.0Vocabulary is varied and generally effective for describing spatial change, with items such as prospective, expanded and accommodate. There are minor imprecisions: traversing across is redundant, and bus station misnames the bus stop labelled on both plans.
7.0A variety of complex structures, including passive and conditional forms, is used with flexibility and accuracy, and errors such as 'where it is now' are rare and do not impede meaning.
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