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四个国家的预期寿命

Life Expectancy in Four Countries

The bar chart gives information about the life expectancy in Japan, Korea, the United States, and Indonesia, and the table shows the change in life expectancy between 1953 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

柱状图给出了日本、韩国、美国和印度尼西亚的预期寿命信息,表格显示了1953年至2008年间预期寿命的变化。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:四个国家的预期寿命

为什么这是混合图 ,要求你把两张图中的主要规律联系起来。

所以我们把要点分为概述(每张图的要点)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

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总体评价

The response accurately reports all four life expectancies and increases, with a clear overview and logical paragraphing. Its 160 words meet the minimum, and the approximate figures are supported by the visuals. Further improvement would come from connecting the two displays more explicitly and quantifying selected comparisons. Language is generally well controlled, with a missing relative-clause comma and a few opportunities for more precise statistical wording.

TA

任务完成情况

All key features of the chart and table are reported accurately, including the highest and lowest life expectancies and the greatest and smallest gains. The response meets the 150-word minimum. Linking Indonesia’s low 2008 level directly to its large increase would strengthen the synthesis of the two visuals.

8.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The response is logically organised into a clear introduction, overview, and separate body paragraphs for each visual, with cohesive devices used naturally throughout.

8.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate, with clear language for rankings and comparisons, such as “close behind” and “relatively modest”. “Average lifespan” is less specific than “life expectancy”, while “surged” can suggest a pace of change that the table does not establish.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Complex sentences, relative clauses and participial phrases are generally well controlled. Examples include the introduction’s “while” clause and “marking the greatest increase” in the final paragraph. A comma is missing before the supplementary “which” clause about the United States in the overview.

8.0

下一步改进重点

Link Indonesia’s lowest 2008 life expectancy to its largest increase, then quantify a useful contrast, such as its roughly 12-year gap below Japan. Add the comma before “which” in the overview; extra length is not needed simply to meet the minimum.

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句型:四个国家的预期寿命

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