The report attempts all six sectors and identifies manufacturing and non-defence employment as broadly stable over time. It does not claim equal male and female manufacturing counts: it gives different figures for each. The real problems include inaccurate defence changes, unclear banking and communications comparisons, and a final male-majority claim that overlooks female majorities in 1995.
5.0There is a visible progression from introduction to body paragraphs to an overview, but linking is mechanical and some sentences, such as the trade and defence descriptions, break down and confuse the reader.
5.5Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the sectors, but enrollment is inaccurate for employment and several descriptions are imprecise. 'Ladies dramatically growth' has an incorrect word form. Lakh is a legitimate unit equal to 100,000; it is not inherently a vocabulary error, although consistent units would make comparisons easier.
5.0A limited range of structures is used with frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and agreement, such as 'While 1975 it has half' and 'males was more working', which sometimes impede meaning.
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