加勒比海某岛屿游客人数(2010–2017)

Caribbean Island Tourist Numbers (2010–2017)

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了2010年至2017年间到访某个加勒比海岛屿的游客人数。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:加勒比海某岛屿游客人数(2010–2017)

为什么这是折线图 ,要求你描述随时间变化的主要趋势和变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(整个时期的主要趋势)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

3个要点

要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers all three lines and follows a broadly logical sequence. However, it miscalculates percentage growth and describes the total as rising constantly despite a plateau. Recurring language problems, including "raise" for "rise", "slop" and "who staying", reduce precision, while clearer comparisons between the two accommodation groups would strengthen the account.

TA

任务完成情况

The response identifies overall growth and describes both accommodation groups and the total. However, it confuses a final level of 350% of the starting figure with percentage growth, overlooks the total’s 2015–2016 plateau when saying "constantly", and omits the reversal in the groups’ relative sizes.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression is broadly clear, moving from an introduction and overview to the two accommodation groups. However, linking is sometimes formulaic, as in "Moving on with" and "When we look at", and the final sentence combines stages through the unclear connection "although as".

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

The writer attempts some variety in trend language but makes recurring word-choice errors, including 'amount of tourists', 'raise' for 'rise', 'fixed positive slop', and the misspelling 'Carribean'.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A range of structures is attempted, but errors are frequent though rarely impeding, such as 'who staying', 'neither no strict and permanent increase', and inconsistent tense and article use.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Replace informal or inaccurate phrasing with precise vocabulary and check subject-verb and quantifier patterns so that verb choices like rise/increase and countable references like 'the number of tourists' are used correctly throughout.

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