Living Close to Where You Were Born

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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, whilst most individuals reckon that they should reside most of their time in their parent’s homes, others have a diverse view of moving their home locations . I am convinced that residing in the family’s apartment some sort of stability. Thus, , along with merits and demerits, will be further explained.

To begin with, there are several reasons to live close to your parent’s house such as the sense of community with the neighbours of the same building block. To illustrate, when the individual lives in a townhouse with the same people for several years, this will and loyalty between people. For example, an article published in Times Magazine has shown that in Egypt prefer to stay in their for a long time to ensure their proximity to their friends and neighbours. Therefore, what can be said is that living in the same accommodation for a while does not only promote stability but also influences the well-being of people.

Moreover, there are a plethora of benefits and drawbacks of the mentioned phenomenon among societies. In other words, spending quality time with family members in proximity to their original flats, which will impact people’s happiness in a significant manner. Nevertheless, commuting to the workplace which is located in distant places is one of the . For instance, in Egypt, where most multinational companies are located on the outskirts of Cairo, where most employees in Egypt . It is recommended that all factors before making a decision that may contribute to the personal and professional life satisfaction of family members.

In conclusion, after presenting the above-mentioned points, it can be reiterated that families should assess the positives and negatives before to their neighbourhoods. I believe that it varies from one person to another based on the circumstances and financial status of family members.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The strongest aspect is the ambitious use of academic vocabulary and complex sentence forms, which shows real language awareness. The main limitation is that ideas are often overstated or imprecisely connected, so the reasons and the advantages and disadvantages are addressed unevenly and with strained phrasing rather than clear, well-developed support.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task and states a position, but the reasons and advantages are developed unevenly, and some claims (such as the sentence about employees seeking jobs in Cairo) are confusingly expressed rather than clearly relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and linkers appear throughout, but cohesion is often mechanical and some progressions, like the example about multinational companies, do not follow coherently from the preceding point.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a clear attempt at less common vocabulary ('plethora', 'lucrative', 'contemporary epoch'), but usage is frequently imprecise or unnatural, such as 'discerns as advantageous' and 'the ills of living in their born places'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A range of complex structures is used with some flexibility, yet noticeable errors in articles, agreement, and clause construction recur without impeding overall communication.