Sample response & feedback

Future Preference for Domestic Holidays Over Travel Abroad

Question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It has been shown that people love to travel in their holidays and some argue that most individuals will in their own country instead of going to another nation. Not only it has saved the expenses of travelling but also it avoids communication problems of location. In this essay, I completely with the above, and that has been elaborated on in the .

Firstly, the cost of travel which has been borne by travellers during their trip will get reduced much. A trip abroad required a visa, and that has some fee which gets charged from the destination country. For instance, travelling to Canada, required a tourist visa and that cost around 100 dollars. Furthermore, the charges of hotels in abroad places are mostly high as compared to the native nation, such as services charges and taxes are different everywhere, and owing to this , it has more fees at those places. Therefore, to save all this extra money, will decide to tour .

Secondly, many individuals have a communication problem, it has been seen in many countries where their citizens are more comfortable in their home language. if they don’t know other languages, and planning to abroad that will lead them to much trouble communicating with locals. For example, in ,India more than 28 languages have been spoken by their citizens , and many don’t know the other country’s languages, they always prefer local trips. Clearly owing to this issue, most will choose to make a trip , .

In conclusion, travel brings lots of expenses and communication problems to travellers. I totally agree that people love to visit new places, they will choose to visit their own nations rather than go abroad.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.5

The strongest aspect is the clear, consistent position supported by two relevant reasons, each developed with concrete examples such as visa costs and language barriers in India. The main limitation is the frequent grammatical and lexical inaccuracy, including tense misuse, faulty article use, and awkward phrasing, which regularly strains the reader.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.0

The response addresses the task with a clear and consistent agreement position, developing two relevant main ideas with supporting examples, though the arguments remain somewhat simple and under-extended.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas are organised into logical paragraphs and linked with basic connectors such as firstly, furthermore, and therefore, but referencing and mechanical linking are sometimes faulty and progression is occasionally strained.

LR Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the message but limited and often imprecise, with errors such as 'regards of foreign', 'in holidays time', and awkward collocations that reduce fluency and precision.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in tense, clause boundaries and verb patterns, such as “I completely agreed”, comma-spliced clauses and “opt destination”, repeatedly affect accuracy and readability.