Spending Money on Space Exploration Technology

Some people believe that spending money on developing technology for space exploration is not justifiable and that there are more beneficial ways to spend this money.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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WhyThis is anOpinion essay — it asks whether you agree or disagree with a statement.

SoWe split the ideas intoReasons to agree(supports the statement)andReasons to disagree(argues against it).

Reasons to agree

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Reasons to disagree

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Essay · 382 words · 4 paragraphs · 25 comments

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Response 01
Estimated band6.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response takes a clear position and supports it with two relevant, developed arguments about education and healthcare, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is recurring grammatical inaccuracy and somewhat repetitive, mechanical linking that reduces precision despite generally clear meaning.

TR

Task Response

The position is stated clearly and both main ideas about education and healthcare are relevant and supported with explanation and examples, though development is sometimes repetitive and the argument is not deepened beyond basic points.

6.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

There is a broadly clear overall progression with appropriate paragraphing, but linking is mechanical and repetitive, with frequent reliance on 'so' and occasionally awkward transitions between ideas.

6.0
LR

Lexical Resource

There is an adequate vocabulary range, including “monetary help”, “financial assistance” and “abject poverty”. However, errors such as “expansive” for “expensive” and “the quintessential of it” reduce precision, alongside awkward combinations such as “utilizing money on”.

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but recurring problems with clause formation and verb forms reduce accuracy. Examples include the missing relative clause in “People either belong ... are experiencing” and passive forms in “their curiosity will kill” and “are not treating well”.

6.0

What to work on next

Revise clause structure and active/passive verb forms, especially “People either belong ... are experiencing” and “are not treating well”. Replace repeated uses of “So” with explicit links between funding, access to services and the benefits you claim.

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