Application Letter for Childcare Job in Australia

6 Sample Responses · Bands 7.0–8.0

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Response 01

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in response to an advertisement, published last week in one of the leading Australian family magazines, where you asked for a short term live-in caregiver for your six-year-old child. I have proper experiences to take the best care of your child, and I would like to take the job. I am confident that I would be able to render a great service in taking care of your child since I have had a good experience in raising a couple of younger siblings as the eldest child of my family. Besides, I love children since I consider them as a bundle of joy, and that is why I took care of some young children as a babysitter in my hometown. In fact, I find children so special that I have taken a short online course on parenting so that I could relate to them in a better way. By the way, I recently came to visit Australia from my home country at the invitation of my uncle in order to live with him for the next six months or so. And, while I am in Australia, I would also love to explore this beautiful country and learn about the lifestyles and culture of its people in addition to taking care of your child should you choose to offer me the job. Yours faithfully, Daria Olga

Score details

Response 01
Estimated band7.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The letter addresses all three bullet points and supports the application with relevant childcare experience and a parenting course. Its main practical weakness is the unresolved difference between living with the uncle and taking the advertised live-in job. Presenting the whole letter in one block also weakens organisation, while some awkward wording and casual transitions reduce the professional tone.

TA

Task Achievement

The letter addresses motivation, relevant childcare experience and free-time plans. However, the stated intention to live with an uncle for six months needs reconciling with the family's live-in requirement, and the sightseeing plans could be identified more explicitly as free-time activities.

7.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas progress from purpose to qualifications and plans in Australia, but the greeting, body and sign-off are all in one block. Separating these into appropriate letter sections would clarify the progression; 'By the way' also introduces practical details too casually.

7.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is generally adequate and topic-relevant, but phrases like 'proper experiences', 'render a great service', and 'a bundle of joy' show occasional imprecision and unnatural collocation.

6.5
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A good range of sentence structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with mostly accurate control, with only minor errors such as 'I have proper experiences' affecting naturalness.

7.0

What to work on next

Clarify whether you can live with the family for the full six months, then separate the greeting, purpose, qualifications, free-time plans and closing into readable letter sections.

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