人们与家人分离的时间越来越长

Spending More Time Away from Families

Today, people in many countries have to spend more and more time away from their families.

Why is this happening?

What effects does this have on the people themselves and on their families?

如今,许多国家的人不得不花越来越多的时间远离家人。

这是为什么?

这对这些人自己及其家人有什么影响?

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写作思路:人们与家人分离的时间越来越长

为什么这是双问题类 ,要求你在一道题中回答两个不同的问题。

所以我们把思路分为问题 1(回答第一个问题)和问题 2(回答第二个问题)。

问题 1

7条思路

问题 2

10条思路

同一道题 · 不同范文

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范文 01

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作文 · 290词 · 5段 · 14条批注

分数详情

范文 01
估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The response answers both parts of the question directly, with clear causes, developed effects, and a relevant supporting example. Its strongest aspect is the logical, well-paragraphed structure and generally flexible language. The main limitation is some imprecise word choice and a tendency toward summarised rather than deeply elaborated ideas, which keeps the development good rather than excellent.

TR

任务回应

The response addresses both questions directly with a clear position, relevant causes and effects, and a concrete supporting example, though some ideas remain under-elaborated rather than fully extended.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are organised in clear paragraphs with logical progression and effective cohesive devices, with only occasional mechanical linking and slightly abrupt transitions within paragraphs.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

There is a good range of topic-appropriate vocabulary used with some flexibility, though occasional imprecise or awkward collocations such as being open to life-changing doors slightly reduce precision.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Complex structures are generally controlled, including relative clauses and a semicolon joining related ideas. The “made it easier” sentence leaves the action unstated, and several punctuation marks have stray preceding spaces.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Deepen the development of each main idea with fuller explanation and more precise, natural vocabulary choices instead of broad claims and vague phrasing.

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实用词汇:人们与家人分离的时间越来越长

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句型:人们与家人分离的时间越来越长

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