写信给房东申请延长公寓租期

The letter covers all three bullet points from the prompt with appropriate detail: an extension of six months, a job promotion as the reason for changed plans, and a broken heater with a request for an electrician, using a broadly suitable semi-formal tone despite some awkward politeness formulas.

Progression is generally clear and the letter moves logically through its purpose, but cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, with misplaced transitions such as 'As, I have better career opportunities' and a loosely connected sentence about being a reliable tenant.

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some appropriate register ('lease agreement', 'career opportunities', 'surroundings'), but imprecise or erroneous word choices like 'a Onus tenant', 'give my rent', and 'looking from hearing' show limited flexibility.

The letter attempts coordination, reason clauses and a conditional request, but frequent grammatical errors include 'one of your tenant', 'things will same', and 'requesting you that I want to live'; these reduce precision without generally obscuring meaning.

The letter addresses all three bullet points clearly, stating the requested two-year extension, explaining the changed job situation, and reporting the kitchen sink leak, with a mostly suitable tone, though some phrasing slightly obscures the intended meaning.

The request, changed plans and repair problem follow a logical sequence, but the opening links the greeting unclearly to an earlier discussion, and several successive connectors make the development mechanical. 'Initially' correctly introduces the writer's earlier plans.

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the purpose with some good attempts like 'well-maintained' and 'amenities', but there are noticeable collocation errors such as 'doing really well with me', 'I am promptly waiting', and 'make agreement'.

A range of sentence structures is attempted with some complex forms, yet recurring grammatical slips, including 'looking forward live in this place' and 'I want to make agreement', reduce overall accuracy.

The letter clearly states the requested extension to March 2025, explains the changed plans through the support worker program, reports the water heater problem, and maintains a suitably polite tone, with only minor lapses such as the incorrect 'Your faithfully' closing.

The letter progresses logically from the extension request and explanation to the heater problem and closing. The long opening paragraph is less easy to scan, and the relative clause after “locality” briefly obscures that it is the program which will finish.

The letter has sufficient vocabulary to explain the lease extension, study plans and repair request. Some expressions are awkward or unnecessarily indirect, including “in proximity to the locality”, “showered chilled water” and “reply positively”, reducing precision without obscuring the main message.

The letter uses a range of complex sentences, but accuracy is uneven: “personal support worker program” lacks an article, “is not working from the last two days” needs a continuing-time construction, and the comma after “but” is misplaced.

The letter directly and fully addresses all three bullets from the prompt, stating the desired one-year extension, explaining the changed study plans, and raising the heating problem with a clear request, all in an appropriately polite register.

Ideas are organised into logical, well-signposted paragraphs with effective sequencing devices, and the message progresses coherently from opening to closing request.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'rental agreement', 'settled into', and 'bring to your attention', and only rare minor imprecision.

A wide range of sentence structures is used with strong control, including well-formed conditionals and relative clauses, with errors so rare they barely impede communication.

The letter fully achieves its communicative purpose, addressing the requested extension length, the work-related reason for the change of plans, and the plumbing problem with appropriate detail and a consistently suitable polite tone.

Ideas progress logically through a clear opening purpose, well-sequenced body paragraphs aligned to each bullet, and cohesive devices such as 'consequently' and 'additionally' used naturally throughout.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with natural collocations like 'extend my stay,' 'immediate cause for concern,' and 'at your earliest convenience,' though a few phrases are slightly formulaic or stiff.

Conditional phrasing, subordinate clauses and varied sentence patterns are used accurately, including the indirect request beginning I would appreciate it if and the clause introduced by whether.