中心图书馆20年来的平面布局变化

Central Library Floor Plan Changes Over 20 Years

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了一座公共图书馆20年前的平面图以及它现在的样子。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:中心图书馆20年来的平面布局变化

为什么这是地图 ,要求你描述一个地方发生了哪些变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(这个地方的整体变化)和主要变化(新增、拆除、移动或保留了什么)。

概述

2个要点

主要变化

8个要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers most of the significant changes on both sides of the floor plan and provides a clear general overview of the redevelopment. Its main limitations are a few inaccuracies in locating or describing changes, and recurring grammatical slips with number agreement and articles.

TA

任务完成情况

The response presents a relevant overview and reports most key changes on both sides of the plan, but it places the former children's books room in the south and wrongly identifies the former adult non-fiction area as adult fiction.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The response organises information with a clear overview and side-by-side progression using cohesive devices such as 'in addition' and 'as for', though the linking is sometimes mechanical and the phrase 'in terms of' is used imprecisely.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

The response uses an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary for change, including 'converted', 'replaced', and 'newly constructed', but it contains spelling slips such as 'exisiting', 'Tabls', and 'turnd' along with slightly imprecise phrasing.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

The response uses a reasonable variety of structures including passives and participial modifiers, but errors in number agreement such as 'several new room', 'children's books... was converted', and 'room... were converted' recur throughout without obscuring meaning.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Verify the exact position and content of each change against the diagram before writing, and proofread for subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

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