与同事在工作时间之外社交

Socialising with Work Colleagues Outside Working Hours

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

有些人认为,晚上和周末与同事社交是个好主意。另一些人则认为,把工作生活与社交生活完全分开很重要。

请讨论这两种观点,并给出你自己的看法。

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写作思路:与同事在工作时间之外社交

为什么这是讨论类 ,要求你讨论两种对立的观点,并给出自己的看法。

所以我们把思路分为第一种观点(支持第一种观点)和第二种观点(支持第二种观点)。

第一种观点

3条思路

第二种观点

2条思路

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总体评价

The strongest aspect is the clear, balanced structure that discusses both views with relevant examples before stating a definite opinion. The main limitation is that ideas, while coherent, remain somewhat predictable and under-developed in depth, relying on generalised rather than concrete support.

TR

任务回应

Both views are addressed with a clear position, and main ideas are supported with relevant though somewhat generalised examples.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The response is logically organised with clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices, though some linking is slightly mechanical.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

There is a sufficient range of topic-appropriate vocabulary used with reasonable precision, though some expressions are formulaic.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A variety of sentence structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used accurately with only minor, non-impeding slips.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Deepen the development of each main idea with more specific, concrete examples and analysis rather than generalised claims.

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句型:与同事在工作时间之外社交

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