投诉火车票无效及工作人员不愿帮忙

Complaint About Invalid Train Tickets and Unhelpful Staff

You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you.

Write a letter to the train company. In your letter:

Describe the problem you had with the tickets

Say why you were unhappy with the staff

Suggest what action the train company should take

你最近提前一周买了一些火车票用于出行。当你去车站乘车时,被告知这些票不能使用,而且工作人员对你毫无帮助。

给火车公司写一封信。在信中:

描述你在车票方面遇到的问题

说明你为什么对工作人员不满

建议火车公司应该采取什么措施

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书信要点:投诉火车票无效及工作人员不愿帮忙

为什么这是正式书信 ,要求你用正式的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Describe the problem you had with the tickets

1个要点

Say why you were unhappy with the staff

3个要点

Suggest what action the train company should take

3个要点

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估算分数7.5/ 9

总体评价

The letter's strongest aspect is its full, well-organized coverage of all three bullet points in an appropriately formal tone with clear detail. The main limitation is language that is sometimes formulaic and slightly overwrought, which keeps it below fully natural, flexible expression.

TA

任务完成情况

The letter directly and fully addresses all three bullet points with specific invented detail such as dates, route, and number of tickets, and maintains a consistently formal register suited to a company complaint.

8.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are logically sequenced with clear paragraphing and cohesive devices like 'In relation to' and 'Given this inconvenience', though some linking is slightly mechanical or formulaic.

7.5
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise for the communicative task, with phrases like 'dismissive behaviour' and 'unusable tickets', but some wording is somewhat overwrought or conventional.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A wide range of structures is used with generally good control, including relative and conditional clauses, with only minor errors or awkward phrasings that do not impede meaning.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Vary sentence structures and vocabulary beyond rehearsed complaint-letter phrases so the writing sounds more natural and precise.

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