就大学住宿问题给朋友提建议

Advising a Friend on University Accommodation

Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Write an email to your friend. In your email • describe where you lived when you were a student at the university • recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation • warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your email as follows: Dear ……………,

你的朋友获得了你曾就读的那所大学的一门课程的入学名额。他/她想听听你关于寻找住处的建议。

给你的朋友写一封电子邮件。在邮件中

• 描述你在这所大学读书时住在哪里

• 推荐他/她寻找住宿的最佳方式

• 警告他/她学生在选择住宿时会犯的错误

不需要写任何地址。

邮件的开头写:

Dear ……………,

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书信要点:就大学住宿问题给朋友提建议

为什么这是非正式书信 ,要求你用友好的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university

3个要点

Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation

4个要点

Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

4个要点

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The letter achieves a warm, appropriately informal tone and covers all three bullet points from the prompt, including a personal description of where the writer lived and practical warnings. The strongest aspect is the natural, friendly register with some precise vocabulary, while the main limitation is that the recommendation and warning sections are somewhat briefly developed and loosely connected.

TA

任务完成情况

All three prompt bullets are addressed in a consistently friendly register with relevant detail, though the advice and warning points are developed somewhat thinly, with the heating warning being the only caution offered.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The letter progresses logically through greeting, advice, personal experience, and warning, with cohesive devices used naturally, although some transitions like 'But, wherever' feel slightly informal and abrupt.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise for the context, with natural collocations such as 'gain admission', 'post advertisements', and 'pricey', though occasionally wordy phrasing like 'having confidence in my advice in finding accommodation' reduces precision.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A good range of structures is used with generally strong control, including conditionals and relative clauses, with only minor punctuation and comma issues such as 'the flat or home, you decide to rent, has' affecting flow.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Develop each bullet point more fully with specific supporting detail, such as concrete steps for searching and more than one mistake to avoid.

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