工业用地改造规划

Plan to Redevelop an Industrial Site

The maps below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的地图给出了关于一项工业用地改造规划的信息。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:工业用地改造规划

为什么这是地图 ,要求你描述一个地方发生了哪些变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(这个地方的整体变化)和主要变化(新增、拆除、移动或保留了什么)。

概述

2个要点

主要变化

5个要点

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分数详情

范文 01
估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers all major changes across the site with a clear overview and generally accurate comparisons, showing strong control of complex structures and topic-specific vocabulary. The main limitation is a handful of imprecise or confusing details, such as the description of the apartment and parking arrangements on the eastern side, which slightly blur the accuracy of the report.

TA

任务完成情况

The response presents a clear overview and covers the main changes, including new housing, communal gardens, garages and private roads. However, describing housing as expanding incorrectly implies that it already exists, and the eastern apartment and parking arrangement needs greater precision.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are logically organised by area with clear progression and a good range of cohesive devices, although occasional phrasing such as 'on arrival, residents will benefit from another apartment' slightly obscures the message.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate for describing redevelopment, including “communal gardens” and “office complex”. Some collocations are less precise: gardens are described as “erected”, and “knocked down” is applied jointly to a parking space and a storage room.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A wide range of complex structures is used with control, including relative and participial constructions like 'to the north of which is an entrance', with only occasional errors in form affecting precision.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Verify each spatial and functional detail against the maps before writing so that every described change matches the visual exactly, particularly around multi-feature areas.

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实用词汇:工业用地改造规划

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句型:工业用地改造规划

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第1部分

建议用时约 20 分钟,至少写 150 词。

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