2014年三种金属的月度价格变化

Monthly Price Changes of Three Metals in 2014

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了2014年期间三种金属价格的月平均变化。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:2014年三种金属的月度价格变化

为什么这是折线图 ,要求你描述随时间变化的主要趋势和变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(整个时期的主要趋势)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

3个要点

要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers all three metal trends with a clear overview and a good amount of accurate detail from the graph. Its main limitation is the recurring grammatical and wording errors, particularly in the opening and overview sentences, which reduce polish without fully obscuring the message.

TA

任务完成情况

The response presents a relevant overview and covers all three metals with mostly accurate data. However, zinc starts near 1%, not 2%, and copper reaches about 1.5% in December rather than both November and December. Describing nickel as relatively stable from March to May is reasonable compared with its larger movements.

6.5
CC

连贯与衔接

Information follows logical month-by-month sequences for each metal, but the introduction, overview, nickel details and copper details occupy one paragraph, with only zinc separated. Several flawed sentences, including 'In zinc followed a downward trend', also disrupt progression.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is generally adequate for describing change, with terms like 'sharp decline', 'fluctuations' and 'recovered', but it lacks range and includes imprecise or erroneous usage such as 'line chat', 'most highest' and 'make comparison and relevant'.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

There is some use of complex structures and time sequencing, yet sentence errors are frequent, including missing verbs, faulty articles and agreement problems, which occasionally strain but mostly do not block meaning.

5.5

下一步改进重点

Proofread for basic sentence structure and verb forms, especially in the introduction and overview, so that ideas are expressed accurately from the first sentence.

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