四个国家的牛奶产量

Milk Production in Four Countries

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下表显示了四个国家在1990年、2000年和2010年的牛奶年产量。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:四个国家的牛奶产量

为什么这是表格 ,要求你对关键数据进行归类和比较。

所以我们把要点分为概述(表格中的主要规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

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要点

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The response is well organised with a clear overview and mostly accurate comparison of the four countries, supported by controlled and flexible language. Its main limitation is a serious data error, since Tanzania's final figure is stated as exceeding 1.5 million litres when the table shows 155,000 litres, alongside some imprecise phrasing.

TA

任务完成情况

The response covers all four countries and years with a clear overview and relevant comparisons, but the claim that Tanzania exceeded 1.5 million litres misrepresents the table's 155,000 figure and reduces data accuracy.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas progress logically through an overview and grouped country comparisons with effective cohesive devices such as 'overall', 'whereas' and 'meanwhile'.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is varied, with expressions such as 'annual milk production' and 'underwent a consistent fall', but 'Australian counterparts' has an unclear referent and 'massive surge' overstates the impression created by Tanzania's actual increase.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Complex structures, including clauses joined by 'while' and 'whereas' and participial phrases, are generally controlled. The comparison of milk production with 'the aforementioned countries' needs a matching noun referent.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Verify every figure against the table before writing, especially small numbers that can be misread by a factor of ten.

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句型:四个国家的牛奶产量

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