石器时代切割工具的发展

Development of Stone Age Cutting Tools

The diagram below shows the development of the cutting tool in the Stone Age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图展示了石器时代切割工具的发展。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:石器时代切割工具的发展

为什么这是流程图 ,要求你从头到尾说明一个过程的先后顺序。

所以我们把要点分为概述(共有几个阶段,从哪里开始、到哪里结束)和阶段(按顺序列出每一步)。

概述

2个要点

阶段

2个要点

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The response is clearly organised, covers all views of both tools, and uses varied vocabulary and sentence structures. Tool B is visibly larger, so that comparison should not be penalised; Tool A’s approximate length is also broadly consistent with the scale. The main weaknesses are a general overview and unsupported judgments about craftsmanship and sturdiness, alongside the plural error in “view” and the incorrect verb form “grounded”.

TA

任务完成情况

The response covers both tools and all three views, but its overview could name the visible changes more directly. Tool B is visibly larger, and an approximate length for Tool A can be estimated from the scale; the weaker claims concern craftsmanship, sturdiness and the cause of improved performance.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are arranged logically with a clear progression from overview to Tool A to Tool B, and cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Second' and 'Finally' are used appropriately.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is reasonably varied, including “rudimentary” and “finely sharpened”. However, “grounded” should be “ground” for smoothing a surface, and “chiselling effort” is less precise than a description of visible marks.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A good variety of sentence structures is used with frequent error-free clauses. The singular “view” should be plural in “front and back view”; simple past would also make “had seen vast improvements” more direct. “Dated back” is consistent with the surrounding past-tense description.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Name the main visible changes in the overview, then support them with shape, surface and profile comparisons. Use the scale for approximate measurements, and separate visible features from claims about manufacturing skill or strength.

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