1972至2012年图书销售类型占比

Book Sales by Genre Between 1972 and 2012

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的饼图显示了1972年至2012年一家书商所售五类图书的百分比。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:1972至2012年图书销售类型占比

为什么这是饼图 ,要求你比较各部分的比例和占比最大的部分。

所以我们把要点分为概述(占比最大的部分或主要变化)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

3个要点

要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers all three years and several key figures, but its conclusion does not clearly summarise changes across the period. It confuses sales shares with customer preferences and describes adult fiction’s 25% share in 1992 as a majority. The incomplete introduction and frequent language errors also reduce clarity. Approximate figures such as around 20% for 22% are defensible.

TA

任务完成情况

The response covers all three charts, but the conclusion misses the main changes over time. It confuses percentages of books sold with customer preferences and calls adult fiction’s 25% share in 1992 a majority. Reporting 22% as around 20% is reasonable rounding; biography’s 8% share in 2012 could provide more useful numerical support.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression through the three time points is broadly clear, but cohesive devices are used mechanically and at times inappropriately, as with 'Whereas,' and 'But,' at the start of clauses.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for describing proportions, but word choice errors including 'frictions', 'an ant share', and 'intimation' reduce precision and occasionally impede clarity.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but errors are frequent, including 'books word sold form adult', 'liked to purchased', and tense inconsistencies, though the message is mostly still clear.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Build the overview around changes in sales shares: fiction gained share, while the other categories ended lower. Distinguish the largest share from a majority, and describe percentages of books sold rather than percentages of people or their intentions.

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句型:1972至2012年图书销售类型占比

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