The modern world is integrated socially where technology plays a crucial role. While technology has to enjoy , they have also become dependent on each other’s support when things do not go well in this fast paced society. This essay will and will explain why people have become more independent nowadays. In the modern world, it is fairly easy to share information with anyone. People are heavily social networking sites where they get updates about the people they are connected to. The posts only shows the amazing things happening in someone’s life like travelling to a new country, getting a job in a top multinational company or buying a car which triggers disappointment and . In order to overcome these thoughts, people need emotional and moral . A recent study conducted highlighted people who are regularly online on networking sites are less happier to those who uses them rarely. modern devices people have become more independent than they were before. A youngster staying away from is more comfortable in managing life by cooking food through online videos or easily commuting from one city to another. has also with their family and loved ones when they are in a different city to earn a livelihood. This has assisted the children to move away from parents to achieve their goals and aspirations. In , the dependence on people will always be there one way or another but due to the modern have become more independent and will continue to do so.
Are People Today More Dependent or Independent?
Some people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The strongest aspect is the clear overall structure: both views are introduced, each is given a body paragraph, and a position on independence is stated and maintained. The main limitation is uneven development, as the argument for independence relies on general claims and the dependence side drifts into social media effects without fully engaging the debate.
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Task Response
6.0Both views are addressed and a position is presented, but the argument for dependence is only partly relevant to the question and the independence side is developed with general rather than extended support.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0There is a clear overall progression with workable paragraphing and linking devices, though cohesion is occasionally mechanical and one concluding sentence breaks down mid-phrase.
Lexical Resource
6.0Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempt at less common items, but collocation errors such as 'less happier', 'involved on', and 'with help of' recur.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex sentences is used with some accuracy, yet errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and incomplete structures are frequent enough to be noticeable.