Many people feel that both females and males should be when attending a course at an educational institution. I am inclined to disagree with this statement. Due to gender equality most people feel that everyone should be given equal rights, but it strikes me that this is not the case. seems to me that women have always been a struggle through the years for them to stand out and not be judged by people for what they do for a living. And I can say that the same goes for men. Why males cannot be stay at home dads? Why females cannot be football players or engineers without people judging them? Having the same number of in each class seems like a good all of them have equal chances to stand out and pursue their dreams . Nevertheless, to my way of thinking this measure solves the problem of gender equality but creates another issue. It is true that people should be treated the is the place where people are accepted for their intelligence, their character and ambition. For instance, it is not fair to take an equal number of females and males when . It is a matter of who deserves the place, that should be . All things considered , I firmly believe that is about people being . It is not fair to anyone if opportunities are and given to women or vice-versa. Everyone should fight for what they want and forget about all the stereotypes that stop us from achieving our goals.
Equal Numbers of Male and Female University Students
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear position against enforced gender quotas and supports it with a relevant merit-based argument, which is its strongest aspect. However, the ideas are unevenly developed, the second paragraph drifts toward the opposing view, and recurring grammatical and word-choice errors throughout limit the overall impression.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
6.0The response addresses the task with a clear disagreeing position and a relevant merit-based argument, but ideas are unevenly developed and the second paragraph partly undermines the stated position.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0There is a recognizable structure with some linking devices, though progression is at times mechanical and the paragraph logic is not always coherent.
Lexical Resource
6.0Vocabulary is adequate for the argument with some idiomatic phrases, but range is limited and there are noticeable inaccuracies such as 'treated inferior', 'taken form', and 'criteria' as a singular noun.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but frequent errors including comma splices, fragments, and faulty agreement reduce overall accuracy while leaving the meaning mostly clear.