Equal Numbers of Male and Female University Students

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Education is of a nation. It is also an important element of human life. No nation can develop and prosper unless properly educated. However, both men and women are equally considered to . Hence, to I believe that the universities should in every subject. The main reason I support the notion that the tertiary institutes should accept and girls is to eliminate gender discrimination. In many countries in the world especially in western countries both men and women enjoy equal degree of freedom in . Unfortunately, this is not the same in third world countries. In fact there is an opposite picture exists especially in poor nations in most of the aspects. For instance, in some nations male doctors are not allowed to inspect and treat female patients and thus the authorities give candidates in those subjects. Whereas there is virtually no sex differentiation and pupils can get admitted any subjects they are interested in. What I want to highlight here is that if educational institutions pick equal number of students from it will not only that might exist once graduates enter employment but also between male and female employees. The other reason I strongly believe that all educational institutes should take the same number of male and female candidates is due to gender empowerment. As we are aware that female candidates may have more attraction to nursing programs whereas male candidates may be interested in sport. This way it might bring inequality of . Therefore, to a particular discipline universities can offer of boys and girls. In fact, such practice would help to stop the disruption between both sexes and will make sure empowerment of both sexes uniquely. In , needless to say that of national and international achievement both sexes are vitally essential. So I believe that both male and female should receive equal level of education and, hence, all institutes should accept the in every subject.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear, consistent position with an attempt at multi-paragraph argumentation, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is imprecise expression, with recurring word-choice and grammar errors, plus arguments (such as the medical-school example) that partly contradict the stated case for equal intake.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The position is clear and sustained, and the response is adequately long, but main ideas are unevenly developed and the supporting examples are confusing or contradictory at points.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and linking devices are used, but progression is at times mechanical and some transitions are broken or inaccurate.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary, though word choice and collocation are frequently imprecise, as in 'ensure gender discrimination' and 'gender ration'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but grammatical errors are frequent, including 'considered backbone' and 'there is an opposite picture exists', though meaning usually remains recoverable.