These days, the issue of gender equality attracts a lot of attention and people argue over how to deal with perceived inequalities in employment and education. Some think that universities should be required to accept equal numbers of male and female students in each subject, but this is a . To begin with, for equality to flourish, people should always be chosen based upon their abilities rather than their identity. In education, as in sports or business, people with talent should be given opportunities. It is extremely unfair that someone is chosen because of their race or gender, despite having lower abilities than someone else. If universities were required to split their classes according to gender, there would almost certainly be a few talented people who were not able to attend because some less talented person of the opposite gender was instead. This is society. the two genders do have somewhat different preferences and abilities in terms of academic subjects, and while equality of opportunity should exist, it cannot be forced upon people or else it will come at the expense of . In teaching, for example, university classes are usually about eighty percent female. to have fifty percent from each gender, there would be a large number of eager young women who could not attend their desired course. This is true in but . to accept more women, then talented men would be declined. In conclusion, the idea of forcing educational institutions to accept equal numbers of students from either gender is patently absurd. It may sound fair, but it is actually very , and would have negative ramifications for society as a whole.
Equal Numbers of Male and Female University Students
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, consistently maintained position against mandatory gender quotas and develops it with relevant reasoning and examples. Its strongest aspect is the coherent argument supported by concrete illustrations, while the main limitation is an overly combative tone in places, with phrasing such as calling the stance ignorant or absurd, which weakens the academic register rather than the argument itself.
IELTS criteria
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Task Response
7.5The essay fully addresses the question with a clear, consistent disagreement position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant examples such as teaching and STEM enrolment.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.5Ideas progress logically through clearly sequenced paragraphs with effective linking devices, although the aggressive tone occasionally distracts from the flow of argument.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is reasonably flexible and precise, including items like detrimental, ramifications, and equality of opportunity, but some informal or emotive word choices reduce the academic register.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A good range of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with generally strong control, though minor errors such as unidiomatic phrasing appear occasionally.