Thank-You Letter to Restaurant for Birthday Party

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also suggest any improvements to make things better.

Annotated response

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude for the valuable services that your restaurant provided on my birthday and made it memorable . All my friends were glad, and we hope to have the same treatment in the future.

Furthermore, I would like to thank all the staff, who . Without , you arranged the room with colourful lighting and balloons in the nick of time, which really , and it shows your good planning.

the food was , and the presentation of it won my heart. Besides, the background music added more charm to my birthday party. It compelled us to dance. Also, the service of the staff was remarkable. They did not show a sign of delay in delivering any items to us. They were available . proud of being the customers of your restaurant.

Suffice to say that everything was satisfactory except some food items, which were not available in your restaurant as some staff might be unfamiliar with some foreign food. In addition, usually, guests are requested to in the basement, which is rather suffocating. Although there is ; however, it would be good if parties were arranged on the terrace, which .

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response's strongest aspect is its complete coverage of the task, as it thanks the restaurant for the food, service, and atmosphere and offers concrete suggestions like using the terrace for parties. The main limitation is unnatural word choice and recurring grammatical slips that make several sentences sound stilted without blocking meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

7.0

The letter achieves its thankful purpose and addresses all prompt elements—food, service, atmosphere, and improvements—with relevant detail and a generally suitable semi-formal tone, though phrasing such as 'valuable services' and the slightly vague improvement section reduces precision.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Ideas are organised in clear paragraphs with a logical progression from thanks to suggestions, but some cohesive devices are misused or unnatural, including 'On the face of it', 'Besides', and 'Suffice to say'.

Lexical Resource

6.5

There is a reasonable range of vocabulary with some ambitious attempts ('luscious', 'in the nick of time'), but several collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as 'at the beck and call of us' and 'did such a great arrangement'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of sentence types is attempted with some complex structures, yet recurring errors in tense agreement ('They make us feel proud'), relative clauses ('which really brings appreciation'), and punctuation around 'however' affect accuracy.