Why People Travel More and Its Benefits

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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Nowadays, people are travelling more than at any time in the past. The main reason for this is that it is cheaper to travel now, and the main benefits of travelling for the traveller are that different cultures and expand their social network. One of the main reasons people are travelling more now is that it is not as expensive as before. That is to say that there are many new , such as , while there were only a few of them in the past. As a result, there is between these companies to attract more customers, which results in massive price reduction. For example, Ryanair, a famous in Europe, sells tickets starting from $15 during the sale, from London to European countries. One of the main benefits of travelling for the traveller is that they can understand different cultures better. This is because when people travel to a new country, they have a chance to spend time with locals and experience their traditions. Also, museums and monuments are mainly visited by tourists to learn more about the country’s culture. Furthermore, being able to is another benefit of travelling. Visitors can meet a plethora of people from different nations while travelling. For instance, people which allows people to stay at locals’ houses when travelling, from all around the globe. In conclusion, the principal reason why people are travelling more than ever before is that it is less costly now, and the main advantages of this are that travellers can learn about different cultures and can from all around the world.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts of the question directly, presenting a clear cause and two well-chosen benefits supported by relevant, concrete examples such as Ryanair and Couchsurfing. Its strongest aspect is this clear, relevant development of ideas; the main limitation is recurring grammatical inaccuracy and occasionally loose lexical phrasing that slightly distracts from an otherwise well-organised argument.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions directly with a clear position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant extended examples, though the cause analysis is somewhat narrow in scope.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organised with a clear progression through paragraphing and varied cohesive devices such as 'that is to say', 'as a result', and 'furthermore', with only minor mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, including phrases like 'massive price reduction', 'plethora of people', and 'expand their social network', with some awkward but non-impeding collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, but noticeable errors in verb forms and agreement, such as 'companies exist now' and 'can expose to', recur throughout.