Nowadays, many people are more . This is because people now can afford travel expenses. There are two main gain knowledge and embrace other cultures. One of the main reasons why has increased is that travel is much more affordable than it used to be. This is partly because of salary rises and partly because essential goods such as food and clothing has fallen. Many families now have two and often have a car. All of these factors increase the likelihood of people becoming tourists. For example, in the past, it might have cost the average person a year’s salary to travel from India to Singapore, but these days it is possible for Indian tourists to enjoy their holidays in another country for the cost of half a month’s pay. This growth in travel means that many people can now enjoy the benefits of , traveling can help to broaden people’s horizons and knowledge. People can travel to different places and can gain knowledge of other religions, cultures, and western lifestyles. Meeting different people from cultures and societies provides an education that is impossible to get in a traditional school. Secondly, one can explore and embrace the of other cultures through traveling. For example, foreigners visiting India are often fascinated by Indian customs and traditions and always try to imitate these valuable traditions. In conclusion, greater affordability is the main reason for increased travel, and the benefits for travelers include enhanced knowledge and increased appreciation of other cultures.
Why People Travel More and Its Benefits
Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response directly answers both parts of the question with a clear reason, two developed benefits, and relevant examples such as the India-Singapore cost comparison. Its main limitation is occasional imprecise or awkward word choice and a few grammatical slips that slightly reduce polish.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0The response addresses both questions directly, presents clear main ideas, and supports them with relevant explanation and concrete examples, with a clear concluding position.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphing and cohesive devices such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', though referencing is occasionally mechanical and minor punctuation slips disrupt flow.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary is generally adequate for the task with some good collocations like 'broaden people's horizons', but several imprecise items such as 'commuting' and 'adds upon knowledge' and occasional word-form errors limit flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures, including relative clauses and conditionals, is used with generally good control, while frequent minor errors such as comma splices and faulty agreement do not impede meaning.