People are travelling more than ever before in recent times. Achieving quality education from abroad is the main reason for this, and the major benefits of travelling for the traveller are they will be entertained by watching exciting things around them and personality development. The main travelling more today is to achieve quality education from abroad. from their own countries may not have . Instead, if they have degrees from abroad, people can compete with other individuals for amazing jobs, and by having such jobs, people’s standard of living improves. For example, many engineers in India are travelling abroad in order to complete their higher education and by achieving quality education from abroad, they can get a phenomenal job anywhere across the world. One benefit of travelling for the traveller is that they are by watching exciting things while people at home have a hectic life style and they do their normal routine work. While travelling, travellers observe mesmerizing lights and new things on their way and get entertained. Moreover, travelling helps of a traveller. This is because, in an airbus they have to wait for a long time , which develops the quality of patience in travellers. For example, while travelling from Melbourne to Hyderabad, travellers have to wait for 16 hours in an aircraft which develops patience and overall personality development in them. In conclusion, today people are travelling more than ever before, to achieve quality education from abroad is the main reason of travelling, and the main benefits of travelling for the traveller are getting entertained by watching exciting things while travelling and personality development.
Why People Travel More and Its Benefits
Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly answers both parts of the question with a stated reason and two supported benefits, and its examples add some relevance. The main limitation is that ideas are simplistic and repetitive, organisation is formulaic, and language errors such as 'ammused' and 'main reason of' recur throughout.
IELTS criteria
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Task Response
6.0The response addresses both questions with a clear reason and two benefits, supported by relevant examples, but ideas are limited in depth and development is somewhat mechanical and uneven.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0Progression is broadly clear with paragraphing and linking devices, but cohesion is mechanical, ideas are repeated across sections, and the conclusion merely restates earlier content.
Lexical Resource
6.0There is adequate range of vocabulary with some attempts at less common items such as 'phenomenal' and 'mesmerizing', though spelling errors and imprecise collocations recur without impeding meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with reasonable accuracy, but frequent article, preposition, and agreement errors such as 'main reason of people travelling' show limited control of more complex structures.