University Education vs Work Experience for a Career

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is the backbone of a country’s future, while a good job is the key factor for a better life. This topic is of particular importance because it affects everyone’s life. This essay will discuss whether should complete their higher education work after school.

On the one hand, university education is mandatory to get . people who choose to become a doctor, pharmacist, engineer, are required to complete their degrees before they a job, because specialized knowledge before starting the career. General Medical in the UK accepts only doctors and passed some predefined exams as a doctor. In this instance, obviously, it would be better to complete the required university level degree first.On the other hand, there are some benefits if students start working early. For example, a fashion designer could start working as soon as school because those types of jobs require more experience than study. Moreover, might help students to be more independent and responsible in their life, through learning how to control their spending, how to enhance their knowledge and skill.To conclude, there are some types of jobs that require a university degree. Nevertheless, starting work after school has a good side as well. It depends on the type of jobs which students prefer and are likely to have in the future. and work experience are both important and the criteria to get a respectable job.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both views with relevant, concrete examples such as medical registration in the UK, and it reaches a reasonable balanced conclusion. Its main limitations are a somewhat delayed and hedged position, occasional mechanical cohesion with missing spacing, and recurring grammatical slips that slightly blur meaning at times.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses both views with developed ideas and relevant examples, but the position remains hedged until the end and the conclusion is somewhat qualified rather than fully resolved.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The argument progresses in a broadly logical paragraph structure, though linking is at times mechanical and formatting lapses such as missing sentence spacing disrupt the flow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is generally adequate and topic-appropriate, with some flexible phrases, but repeated inaccuracy such as 'this type of jobs' and 'for illustrations' limits precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with some accuracy, yet frequent errors including faulty parallelism and 'they each other complete' reduce overall control.