University Education vs Work Experience for a Career

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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, there is an ongoing debate whether by completing further study in university or by will lead someone to be employed in a good job. I personally believe that continuing higher study in a course at university will to get involved .

The , in some ways, increases the need of qualified workers. Moved by this trigger, universities the quality of the students by improving the specialisations and by extending the variety of courses. Taken as an example, business courses have been expanding the field of study in such as public health business which hospital management, pharmacy business, etc. or which develops the candidates to build their social-based businesses of money.

On the other hand, undeniably, students in university practical experiences . Being an employee means , job deadlines, etc. and there are several consequences if they show . To solve this case, internship programmes and core soft skill trainings can be effective . to keep improving the curricula in order to prepare the students with work experiences by entering the upmost graduate students with 3 months working programmes in as well as with several working skills training such as leadership training.

To sum up, in spite of the growth of demand for universities’ graduates in good offer jobs, it is inevitable that they have more positive sides to fit them in such enormous opportunities.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a clear position in favour of university education and develops it with supporting ideas and examples, which is its strongest aspect. However, imprecise wording and recurring grammatical errors frequently blur meaning, and the conclusion does not clearly restate the argument.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses the question with a clear position favouring university education and some relevant examples, but ideas are unevenly developed and the final paragraph does not clearly reinforce the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and linkers such as 'on the other hand' and 'to sum up' are used, yet progression within sentences is often obscured by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is some range of topic-related vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms, such as 'light competitiveness', 'in outrageously types' and 'effective ways out', reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of structures is attempted, including participial and complex forms, but errors in articles, prepositions, agreement and tense occur frequently enough to require rereading.