University Education vs Work Experience for a Career

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, many people believe that is the only way to get a good job. In contrast, some people think that working after high school is better since they can obtain experience . I will outline both issues with reasons and examples.

, it is not easy to achieve. We have to prepare ourselves both in terms of education and skill because they need to cooperate to make a good capability in ourselves, which we know as a prior thing that employers seek in the employees. For example, , about our whether it is or not. They believe that higher education provides people not only in knowledge term but also their maturity. Furthermore, through university education, we are not only given but also practices. So, before we go to the , we already know how to our expected job based on our background education.

It is true that we need experience to do better in our job, but it cannot be denied that education is more important than it. Take a teacher’s career as an example. By teaching earlier, you may have more experience than the new one who just graduated from university. But can teach their students with better theories or with good methods.

To sum up, I must say that we need higher education to gain more information from the experts about our special field, therefore we can do our best to show our capability that we deserve that job. So, I tend to disagree that our study at university.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear position with a relevant teacher example and generally logical progression, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is frequent imprecise word choice and grammatical inaccuracy that, while not blocking meaning, keep the language at an adequate rather than flexible level.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses both views and states a clear final position that university education is preferable, with a relevant teaching example, though development of some ideas remains uneven and support is sometimes generalized.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with paragraphing by viewpoint, but cohesion is at times mechanical, relying on formulaic openers such as 'Talking about good job' and simple sequencers.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempt at less common items, yet recurring imprecise collocations like 'in knowledge term', 'graduated university students', and 'emphasize them' reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, and phrasing ('employer commonly ask', 'we are not only given subsequences of theories') slightly strain communication without obscuring meaning.