University Education vs Work Experience for a Career

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every one yearn for a well-paid and comfortable job. However, those ‘people suppose to either to get a good certificate or learn from work. , the two methods in learning working experiences to guarantee to get a good job.

To begin with, a standard of knowledge to a certain position of work. It is the to guarantee a high-rank and high-salaries job. But this kind of from person to person. Not everyone will stay for long if they are incompatible with the job. , some graduates do not combine theories and practice together. In other words their university time to get their certificate, but not to learn knowledge from university. Moreover, university education equip with abilities, to give students course that relate with another field, they hardly touch in daily life.

As the proverb goes by doing. Practical ability is the to consider his promotion, especially those who gain experience from the world of work. They’ll easily by knowing working place.

Actually, are basically the same are the places to acquire knowledge. Knowledge from books is transformed from practical ability. workplace, knowledge is accumulated and from practical experiences. Reasons for employee to hire employee is employee can provides their labour hours and their skill to help company generate profit. a sum of money.

To be conclude, practical experience and ability is the key to guarantee a good job. Complete a course in university and start work after school to gain experience both can make it. However knowledge and ability they equip with to guarantee them to get a good job is different from person to person.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response addresses both viewpoints and attempts a comparative conclusion that both routes can secure a good job, which is its strongest aspect. However, frequent grammatical and word-choice errors, including agreement faults and incorrect word forms, regularly strain the reader and limit the clarity of the ideas.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.0

The response addresses both views and offers a position that the two routes are broadly similar, but the argument is unevenly developed, the reasoning is sometimes unclear, and the conclusion is muddled by faulty phrasing.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

There is a visible overall structure with paragraphing and basic linking devices such as 'To begin with' and 'In other words', but progression is often mechanical and some sentences disrupt the logical flow.

Lexical Resource

5.0

The response shows some attempt at less common vocabulary such as 'incompatible', 'accumulated', and 'summarized', but limited control and repeated wrong word forms and choices reduce precision throughout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction, such as 'Every one yearn' and 'complete a course capable of ensure', often obscure meaning.