In , it is common for people to work excessive hours and lack the required free time to engage in hobbies and other leisure activities. This essay will argue that . To begin with, the tendency to work is that has reached epidemic levels. All across the developed world, people feel it is necessary for their career to or even be on-call . This causes them to , for long periods, and miss out on healthy activities like sport and gentle exercise. Because these are all important for our physical health, the present situation is destroying people’s bodies and causing them to and . If the working week were made shorter and the weekend were made longer, this situation might improve. In addition to the damaging effect that this situation has on people’s physical health, it is also extremely damaging to their mental well-being. Leisure activities afford people a break from the stress and monotony of working life, as well as a chance to socialise with others. When deprived of this, people can begin to get depressed, anxious, or suffer from other mental health problems. For example, a person who engages in sport on the weekend might find himself isolated from his friends after being required to work through the weekend. This loneliness could trigger a psychological breakdown. If people had longer weekends, they would have more time to , thereby improving their mental health. In conclusion, even though it might be difficult to make this happen due to companies’ interest in making profits, it would be beneficial for most people if working weeks were shortened and weekends lengthened.
Should the Working Week Be Shorter with Longer Weekends?
The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, consistently maintained position and develops it through two well-chosen arguments on physical and mental health, with mostly accurate, flexible language. The main limitation is that supporting ideas remain somewhat general, relying on hypothetical scenarios rather than more concrete or varied evidence.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0The position is clear throughout, all parts of the question are addressed, and main ideas are extended and supported, though development relies on general reasoning and hypothetical examples rather than deeper elaboration.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically across well-organized paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, although sequencing within paragraphs is occasionally formulaic.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'epidemic levels' and 'afford people a break,' though occasional phrases are somewhat informal or imprecise for the register.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, are used with good control, and errors are rare and non-impeding.