Some would say that parents should teach their offspring how to be good members of society, while others are of the opinion that . This essay agrees with the latter point and will show that, despite the practical experiences that parents give their children, school lessons can give deep insights into what it takes to be good citizens. Some believe that parents can educate their children about being good members of society based on their life experiences. This is because the life experiences that parents can give their children are straightforward, down-to-earth, and so they can easily apply what their parents teach them in reality. For example, many children in Thailand become more polite, honest, and caring to everyone as a direct result of the practical lessons that their parents give them at home. However, I believe that and do not spend much time . Lessons at school can provide children with valuable insights into being good members of society. In class, students can different traits of a truly good person that society needs, and then they put what they learn into practice by and solving them together. For instance, after receiving lessons in civic education at school, many Vietnamese students are more willing to help their neighbors and even strangers, and they feel extremely happy after doing something good for others. For this reason, I believe that school lessons are . In conclusion, despite the practical experiences that parents can give their children at home, this essay believes that school lessons can help students deepen their understanding of being good members of society.
Teaching Children to Be Good Members of Society
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The strongest aspect is the clear, consistently maintained position that school is the better place to learn social values, supported by concrete examples from Thailand and Vietnam. The main limitation is that the opposing parental view, while presented, is developed somewhat briefly and is undercut by a personal assertion rather than fuller analysis, and occasional phrasing lacks precision.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0The response addresses both views, states a clear opinion throughout, and supports it with relevant examples, though the first view receives slightly lighter development.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically across well-structured paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, though some transitions and references are at times mechanical.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with good collocations such as down-to-earth and civic education, alongside occasional imprecise phrasing like more influential to young children.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, and most sentences are error-free, with only minor lapses in article and phrasing choices.