Some individuals believe that the right place to teach children how to become good citizens others argue that parents should be the ones responsible for that. Although parents might influence their children more than anyone else, I believe that educational institutions to teach children how to become successful members of the community. Parents influence their children more than anyone else. This is due to the fact that mothers and fathers are the ones who raise and spend most of the time dramatically influences the way children act and think. If parents act , their children will indirectly imitate them. This the fact that no one might exert such a strong influence on their children. For example, a study in Britain showed that children are their teachers. However, I believe that this is not enough and that school should be the place teaching children to become good people in society. good citizens. years studying how to deal with children and train them to become better individuals in their communities. For this reason, educational institutions should be the place where children can safely acquire the needed behaviors to become better individuals in the future. For example, a recent study in the USA showed that 90% of schools train teachers how to help students to become better citizens. For this reason, I believe that the best place to do this is the school. In conclusion, although parents have a strong influence on their children, I believe that the best place to create better citizens is the school to do that.
Teaching Children to Be Good Members of Society
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response fully addresses the task, discussing both views in separate developed paragraphs and maintaining a clear, consistent opinion that schools are better placed to teach citizenship. Its strongest aspect is the logical structure and clear progression throughout. The main limitation is somewhat simple support, including vaguely referenced studies, and occasional imprecision in word choice and tense.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0Both views are addressed in separate, relevantly developed paragraphs and a clear, consistently maintained opinion is presented, though support such as the cited studies is somewhat generic.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas are logically organised with clear progression, and cohesive devices such as 'for this reason' and 'although' are used effectively, though some linking becomes slightly repetitive.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes precise, including phrases like 'educational institutions' and 'exert such a strong influence', but there are inaccuracies such as 'more trained and equipped' and 'tutors' that reduce precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with generally good control, though minor errors such as 'Teachers spent' and some awkward constructions occur.