International Sports Events and Global Tension

Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many renowned sports events, such as the Football World Cup, Cricket World Cup, and other international sports competitions, are imperative to ease the . It will also be a way to express patriotic feelings . I agree with the statement because it paves the way to the nation.

To begin with, every individual has patriotism towards their own country. However, they cannot in public every time, and, moreover, the army to show it. The one way to is through the games. A real-time scenario held in 1983 was a wonderful ceremony where India won the International Cricket World Cup by defeating Pakistan in the finals. That was the first cup for , and the whole nation celebrated like a festival by , sharing sweets, and so on. In addition to this, on the day of the finals, most of the public did face painting, tattoos, karaoke, and many more. the game and in the stadium, giving a supportive voice to the Indian players.

Furthermore, in many other sports events, such as the Olympics, hockey, tennis, and football, their home country as much as possible. Likewise, they treat athletes as their family members. all the international sports events on a decided schedule is necessary. That will be helpful to the audience to give moral support and express their patriotic feelings as this is one secure way of showing their nationalism.

To conclude, patriotism is . The feelings mentioned above are automatically attached to their hearts when they are born. Evidently, games are the only way to deliver patriotic emotions without harming others.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear position with logical paragraphing and a well-extended real-world example, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is uneven development, since the role of sporting events in easing international tensions is barely addressed and some language choices are imprecise.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response presents a clear position and develops the patriotic-emotion side with a relevant example, but it addresses the easing of international tensions only superficially, so coverage is uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and progression is broadly clear with simple cohesive devices, though some connections, such as the shift to a scheduling argument, feel mechanical or loosely tied to the main idea.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is adequate range of vocabulary and some attempts at less common items, but collocations are frequently awkward or imprecise, including phrases like ease the border pressure, in-built function, and patriotic emotions in a safe mode.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with generally acceptable accuracy, but recurring errors in articles, prepositions, verb forms, and phrasing such as the first cup for an Indian country slightly reduce precision.