International Sports Events and Global Tension

Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Each year international sports through out the world. it can be seen that they bring together people belonging from different cultures and regions. I certainly agree that these sports events such as football world cup and cricket tournaments in improving international relationships between different countries but also help people in expressing devotion to their country and promote nationalism. Generally in there are few nations that have disputes and they don't enjoy good diplomatic relations. Undoubtedly these sports competitions bring close together inhabitants of these countries. They positive aspects of mostly concealed by their government and media. For Instance India and Pakistan have tremendous diplomatic differences and also fought three wars but when international cricket it brings both nations . They support their favorite players and team irrespective of their nationality. And enormously beneficial in easing tension between two countries . Moreover these international events attract tourists from all over the world, which not only but at the same time allow locals to learn from people of different cultural backgrounds. It also hostility between people belonging from different countries.Furthermore when people support their teams it and bring them together as a nation. To sum up, international sport events such as Olympics and Fifa world cups are not only very beneficial for boosting international relations but also liberate patriotic feelings.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear, consistent position and supports it with relevant ideas, including a concrete India–Pakistan example and an economic/cultural point. The main limitation is the frequency of grammatical errors—missing verbs, faulty subject-verb agreement, and awkward phrasing—alongside somewhat underdeveloped argument depth.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the task with a clear, consistently maintained agreement position and relevant supporting ideas, including a well-chosen example, though some points remain extended rather than fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is generally clear with appropriate paragraphing and linking devices, but some cohesion is mechanical, and there are occasional abrupt or fragmentary transitions between ideas.

Lexical Resource

6.5

There is an adequate range of vocabulary with some attempt at less common items such as 'alleviate hostility' and 'diplomatic disputes', though errors in word choice and collocation occasionally reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors—missing verbs, subject-verb agreement problems, and sentence fragments—repeatedly reduce accuracy without blocking meaning.