International Sports Events and Global Tension

Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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events are always a source of attraction for everyone and a large number of people to express their love and backing for their motherland. such occasions are mandatory to and satisfy the feeling of superiority over others. The upcoming paragraph sheds light upon various ideas and examples which help to understand why this is an optimistic statement.

At the outset, a large number of fans of come along to rejuvenate themselves by focusing areas on the flexibility and . Moreover, they interact with the followers of other performers and also shout with them as they easily become counterparts of each other. Consequently, it banishes the difference between them and makes them feel proud of each other . , so that the aggression among the natives of a particular area can be , and winning a match against other area-specific residents does reduce the violence.

In addition to this, on due to politics, a country can support another but at the same time, this backing may cause problems between the first nation and the third one. Eventually, balancing becomes paramount and sports events as this allows a series of official meetings. These conversations not only alleviate the issue but also generate opportunities to escalate trade and perform many other operations so that losses can be compensated which occurred because of the support of other nations . To elaborate, Tennis games are conducted in different provinces so that benefits can be enjoyed all around the world keeping are hesitant to view by everyone towards conflicts.

To recapitulate, it is observed that after the Olympics many other events like Commonwealth Games and Asian Games to enjoy benefits at their best. Does a consider citizen word reiterated that Sporting events are crucial to and reduce the chances of conflict among .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response attempts an ambitious, formally structured argument with relevant examples such as the post-war Olympics, which shows genuine engagement with the topic. However, ideas are frequently obscured by misused vocabulary and garbled phrasing, making the development of main points hard to follow.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.0

The position of broad agreement is stated and supported with two relevant main ideas and examples, but the argument is only partially expressed because many points are too unclear or distorted to be fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

A conventional paragraph structure with introductory and concluding framing is present, yet cohesion is largely mechanical and progression breaks down where meaning becomes unclear within body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

5.0

There is an evident attempt at less common vocabulary such as 'de-escalate' and 'paramount', but frequent misselection and misuse, including 'plebeians', 'excreted', and 'scales', obscure meaning regularly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of complex structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors, such as 'releasing their will of patriotism inner harmless way' and faulty relative constructions, reduce clarity throughout.