Increasing Fuel Cost to Solve Environmental Problems

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that traffic and pollution issues would be best tackled by the price of petroleum. In my opinion, this idea is completely flawed and there are several reasonable alternatives.

Clearly the price of fuel has little to do with pressing problems of traffic and pollution. The inevitable demand for time and safe commuting in the modern world , which proves the ineffectiveness of the suggested policy. In other words, even if the price were increased, people would still travel by their preferred form of transport on a daily basis and the problems of traffic and pollution would remain. Additionally, this solution could easily trigger social disagreement and resentment. This, coupled with the expensive fuel to travel every day, could be counter-productive and this proposed idea would become irrelevant.

On the other hand, alternatives to increasing the price of petrol show greater effectiveness. Firstly, governments could implement certain regulations restricting the use of private vehicles such as cars and public transportation. This would relieve many roads from heavy traffic congestion by reducing the number of vehicles on the road, which in turn alleviates the problem of pollution caused by exhaust emissions. Secondly, in many cities around the world, cycling has proved to be an effective, environmentally friendly form of alternative transport and should be encouraged more in other major cities. Certain infrastructure, such as separate zones for cyclists, should be created to help avoid the overload of traffic during rush hour when the number of vehicles can exceed the road’s capacity.

In conclusion, I believe that of fuel used for travelling to address traffic and pollution problems is somewhat more suitable and effective solutions.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear, consistently maintained disagreement with the proposal and develops two well-chosen alternatives with reasonable support. Its main limitation is that it narrows the world's environmental problems to traffic and fuel-related pollution, leaving the broader scope of the question only partially covered, alongside occasional imprecise wording.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response presents a clear position throughout, develops main ideas against the fuel-price proposal and for alternatives, though it treats the broad topic of environmental problems mainly as traffic and pollution, which slightly narrows full coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Paragraphing is logical, progression is clear, and cohesive devices such as referencing and linking phrases are used flexibly with only minor mechanical tendencies.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary shows good range and some precision, but occasional awkward or inaccurate collocations like 'time efficience' and 'inflating the price of petroleum' slightly reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with good control, with only occasional minor errors that do not impede communication.