High Salaries of Sports Professionals vs Other Jobs

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is acknowledged that sport professionals earn huge salaries that . This situation has sparked a heated debate with opinions on both sides, in favor and against.

Some people to pay to people with a natural gift to play . They believe this is unfair for other professionals that studying hard and have to deal with really serious situations daily. Doctors, engineers, clear examples of this unbalanced situation. Furthermore, we are setting a bad example for the youngsters as they grow up witnessing how our .

Nevertheless, other people assert that athletes deserve their salary. They have a very short career, during very limited amount of years. Normally sport players above to keep playing professionally. Moreover, they have a big responsibility to perform their best in every single game. It is their job to their team win, there are millions of dollars involved in each game. Companies invest a lot of money to sponsor teams and this creates on the players.

In a nutshell, I believe that athletes deserve a huge compensation for their work. Even though it is true that they have been naturally gifted however they still need to train hard every day to perform their best and help the sponsors to boost their brand value hence .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The strongest aspect is the clear structure and balanced coverage of both views, ending with a stated personal opinion. The main limitation is the frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and article misuse, along with uneven development of supporting ideas, which keeps the response in the middle bands.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

Both views are addressed and a clear personal position is given in the conclusion, but the development of each argument remains somewhat limited and the support is general rather than fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

The response is organised into logical paragraphs with an introduction, two body sections, and a conclusion, though some sentences link mechanically and the closing sentence contains a confusing construction.

Lexical Resource

6.5

There is an adequate range of vocabulary with some appropriate collocations such as 'sparked a heated debate' and 'boost their brand value', but expressions are occasionally imprecise or awkward, as in 'borned with a natural gift'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of sentence structures is attempted, but errors are frequent, including agreement mistakes ('who has just borned', 'society do not reward'), missing articles, and faulty clause construction, though the meaning is mostly recoverable.