High Salaries of Sports Professionals vs Other Jobs

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are many disputes over the high salaries of the top sports people. Although reasons can be given to unjustified this, personally I believe that .

Many people believe that due to two main reasons. First reason: people believe that provide a vital service to communities like . Football player, for example, earn enormous salaries by simply kicking a ball is something they often refer. while life would be difficult without doctors, engineers and other vital professionals, people could all live happily without .

On the other hand, I would argue that there are many to support the high income in sport. Firstly, people who reach the highest level in sport must be highly skilled and talented. They and practise every day to reach this level of professionalism. deserve high wages. Secondly, the more susceptible to serious injury. If they get hurt, they need more money and support their families . Also, they will not be playing the sports they play for the . Most athletes retire after the age of forty or sometimes even earlier. Finally, sports salaries are only high because sport fans are willing to to watch their favourite stars.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against , but I believe that they deserve the salaries they currently earn.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and states a clear personal opinion, supported by several relevant reasons such as injury risk, short careers, and fan-driven salaries. Its main limitation is frequent grammatical inaccuracy and mechanical, sometimes list-like organisation that slightly hampers fluency.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

Both views are addressed and a clear position is presented with relevant supporting reasons, though some ideas are only briefly developed and phrasing occasionally obscures the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The essay has a logical paragraph structure covering both sides and a conclusion, but cohesion devices are often mechanical or formulaic, such as 'First reason:' and 'The second reason:'.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations, but there are noticeable awkward or inaccurate expressions like 'unjustified this' and 'Hard worker deserve high wages'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A range of structures is attempted, including conditionals and relative ideas, but errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent though rarely obscure meaning entirely.